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| The Estimare's Oath; A private meeting between Kuronan, Clara, and the heads of the Estimare Clan | |
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| Topic Started: May 5 2017, 10:18 AM (182 Views) | |
| Kaynunot | May 5 2017, 10:18 AM Post #1 |
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Kuronan Estimare, Psionic Psion of House Estimare
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Kuronan knocks on Clara's door, waiting to hear her invitation. "Yes?" Kuronan opens the door slightly to peek his head in. "We're expected for a meeting, get your most presentable clothes on and come outside, we don't want to keep them waiting." He closes the door after. "Which version of presentable do you mean? Bodyguard or significant other this time?" He opens the door again. "Significant other, since we have separate lodgings." and then it's closed again. Clara can be heard rustling around inside and eventually exits wearing a flowing green dress. Kuronan will recognize it as the one she wore the day they met at the arena. "Separate lodgings, you say?" "Yes, I thought it appropriate we not be sleeping in the same room seeing as even though you are my bodyguard, you are also my girlfriend and deserve your own space." "Fair enough. Let us go, then." Kuronan, despite having been in the Estate for only a week, seems to know the place already like the back of his hand and lead Clara to a room higher in the building where a table was. The table showed a map of the area owned by the Estimares including towns, provinces and fortifications but more importantly, had three individuals circled around it. The first Clara noticed was a man whose very presence seemed to eminate Veterancy and commanded Respect. His hair was black and flowed to his neck, his beard was carefully trimmed and his build was absolutely massive. On his breast Clara could see several medals including The Raven General's Claw, indicating his status as a Raedsel. Clara's eyes inadvertently glow blue as she analyzes each individual carefully. The second was a woman who was obviously in her early forties but somehow looked no more than thirty, with white silken hair that also extended to her neck and a complexion that was nothing less than Breathtaking (even to Clara) her clothes screamed Nobility and her elegance was obvious as she curtied as Claras turned towards her. The third was a woman with purple hair. She seemed to eminate an aura of magic without even trying as Clara felt like she was somehow lesser for even being in her general vicinity. Her jade eyes seemed to pierce straight through the flesh and peer directly into the soul, and her demeanor was that of nothing less than an Archmage, reflected perfectly in her wardrobe. Clara, clearly out of her element, let her expression harden and she put an arm across her chest and bowed stiffly to the white-haired woman in bodyguard style. Her eyes continued to glow blue. "So this is the woman that took your eye Kuronan? tsk tsk, I always thought you prefered more exotic stock." She said with some contempt though it seemed more aimed at Kuronan than Clara. "Now now Magenta, you know as well as I that this woman is obviously closer to Kuronan than some Ionian Consort could ever be, and it doesn't take someone of your magical potential to realize she's a decent mage in her own right." The silken haired woman's voice even managed to feel like velvet despite sound not having a texture. It was as if the woman's entire existence was somehow comfortable. "We weren't gathered here to judge Kuronan's taste in women. We were gathered here to discuss the terms of Kuronan being brought back into the fold." The Raedsel's voice seemed to boom and oppress. Clara stepped slightly behind Kuronan and remained silent, her eyes still glowing. "Clara, this is Magenta-" Kuronan motioned to the mage. "Tiberius-" the Raedsel "and Adalicia." the noble. "Now then, since it's been a little more than a week since I stated my intention, I'm sure you three have already decided certain terms. What were they?" "First, you will share any knowledge you have garnered and all the notes passed down to you by your ancestors. We are a Mage family first and foremost." "That was already done, as you well know." "I already read the notes, but I wanted to extend that to your Escort as well." Her tone implied more of a command than a request. Clara's eyes darted between Kuronan and Magenta. "I'm afraid I do not understand." "Any knowledge you have and any sort of notes or other heretical knowledge your ancestors have, magical or scientific, will be shared to the best of your ability. It will then be archived along with the rest of our knowledge. That is the price for your Rent." "I- I see. Ah..." Clara is clearly uncertain about how to proceed. "My knowledge is of Zaun, my home state. I have lived there my whole life, employed as a bodyguard to first the slave trader Grul and now to Summoner Kuronan. I know much about the streets of Zaun and what to expect in them. If you are referring to my magic, my specialty is Clairvoyance magic. It has aided me in uncovering threats of various kinds." Clara now seems more uncertain then ever. "As for my ancestors... I am unaware of any family of mine, if it exists." Magenta sighs. "We Estimares have garnered a few special rituals over the years. You will take part and we will chronicle your knowledge of Clairvoyance." She summons a cup of tea and begins stirring. Clara might notice this as a way to relieve stress. "Second, you have already sworn that in the event that Noxus should no longer be allies with Zaun, you will remain loyal to Noxus. There is soon to be a dispute in the Institute between Noxus and Zaun, and for your second condition Kuronan, you will fight for Noxus. to prove your oath." Kuronan bows. "I will do so." Clara's eyes widen. Adalicia notices this, or perhaps she simply realized that Clara may not have been informed. "We do not expect War, before you begin to worry. We Estimares were the very first family to extend a hand to Zaun, and we have no reason to believe this shall escalate to open warfare. Both Noxus and Zaun stand to lose too much if it did." Clara nods lamely. "However, should you decide to copulate with Kuronan, and a child be born, my condition for your rent is that you will acknowledge it is a legal child of our blood." Clara's face flushes, but she nods again, this time more deliberately. "Rest assured your children shall want for nothing should they be born of our blood. The Estimare family is second only to the Du Couteaus in renown, and we do not require a child be a mage or soldier to contribute to our family line." "Thank you, madam." Clara said, obviously still reeling from the implications. "You aren't the first woman that's been in a relationship with a possible heir to one of the Heads of the family and you'll hopefully not be the last. I just wish to make clear that your loyalty-should this relationship result in marriage-will not go unrewarded." Tiberius finally interjected. "As you are not a legal child of Noxus, you would normally be subject to mandatory military service for no less than six years to prove your worth as a Citizen of the State. However, seperating you from Kuronan would in and of itself break your agreement to protect him as his bodyguard. Therefore, my condition is that you will continue to protect him by the terms he specifies. Should you break his terms, you will be expelled from our house. As Kuronan is a Summoner, his condition is he must serve the interests of Noxus as a Summoner for the mandatory 6 years, which does count as Military Service so long as he specifically swears to it. Previous Services to Noxus will be counted retroactively." Clara bows stiffly again. "I will endeavor to make my service the best of its kind, you have my vow." "Then we all have our agreements." "You may speak with any of us as you were one of our children. Simply call for a servant and ask for us, and if we are here, we will answer." "Of course, should we summon you, we expect you to answer as well." "Of course, thank you." "That is all, you two are dismissed." Kuronan bows. "Thank you." Clara bows again as well. Edited by Kaynunot, May 5 2017, 10:21 AM.
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| Rextreff | May 5 2017, 04:34 PM Post #2 |
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Hoy, small fry
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I like how you introduced the characters with different colours so that reader would know who was talking, though I think this was a bit extraneous as it always really mentioned who was talking at which times. There was also a disconnect I felt between the plain black dialouge of Kuronan and Clara which I thought was a bit harder to read because of that. The dialouge was all very formal and serious which fit the tone great. There was clear mention of Clara's actions and could easily inference what she was feeling which was nice, but as to Kuronan there wasn't much going on so one. I like the mention of the Noxian society and military service. How Noxus works kind of reminds me of Starship Troopers and I think this interaction is typical Noxian. I think there was good job of having this feel too. Good writing. |
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| Kaynunot | May 5 2017, 06:06 PM Post #3 |
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Kuronan Estimare, Psionic Psion of House Estimare
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This was basically a copy-pasted roleplay between me and RednaxelaKor, so the lack of communication between what Kuronan was thinking was a result of me focusing on the narrative of the Three Heads of the Estimare Clan opposed to Kuronan. That's the first reason why he doesn't seem to show much reaction (the second being he guessed these terms a while ago, as it said this meeting has been coming for a week at least) The reason why Clara and Kuronan have no separate coloring is because I didn't know what coloring would be appropriate for Clara and I was under the impression Clara would stand out enough on her own without specifically colored dialogue (may go back and edit to give Kuronan the Void color dialogue, both to reflect his true nature and to more easily distinguish.) As to the formal and serious dialogue, Kuronan ICly decided to bring the Estimare Clan back together (being the only surviving member of the Zaunite Estimares, he decided being separate doesn't really serve much purpose as Noxus and Zaun were on good enough terms that the original purpose of the split (having a clan serve as ambassadors) was practically meaningless these days.) this was a discussion on the conditions that Kuronan could return back into the fold. And finally, to your critiques on my own reflections of Noxus... I have roleplayed as Jericho Swain on the side for a very long time, and this has caused me to develop a lot of headcanons about him as well as how Noxus actually is (though the six-year mandatory service was already canon) I'm glad you could appreciate the extra detail I try to breathe into it without trying to force too much. |
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